tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3456408080678473640.post4432164974569114023..comments2022-07-02T08:44:20.368-07:00Comments on Si on devait mourir demain: Application Letter Critique!!Anonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15476233831203292550noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3456408080678473640.post-17346685799514546382013-03-01T07:14:08.107-08:002013-03-01T07:14:08.107-08:00Thanks for this post.it is a nice post.i like this...Thanks for this post.it is a nice post.i like this post very much.I think that Writing a solid job <a href="http://applicants.co.uk/" title="Applying for a Job, Passport, Loan, Credit Card or a CRB" rel="nofollow">Applicants</a> letter is one of the most important steps in obtaining a new job. In today’s tough employment market, a short, interesting job application letter is imperative in order to stand out from the competition.nahidworldhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12947389111301055524noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3456408080678473640.post-42581164942327860812013-02-26T08:45:37.695-08:002013-02-26T08:45:37.695-08:00Hello Jack!
I enjoyed reading your cover letter. T...Hello Jack!<br />I enjoyed reading your cover letter. There were a few grammatical errors I spotted but I believe Chuong and Amira have covered them.<br /><br />Maybe you can consider reducing the number of paragraphs in your cover letter. You can try having your second paragraph center around the explicit skills needed for the job. For example, your computing skills and interpersonal skills. Your third paragraph can be about the soft skills you picked up in your CCAs that are not explicitly stated as necessary by the company. <br /><br />You can also try elaborating more about your computing skills and how it will benefit the company. For example, in terms of regression (very crucial for data analysis).<br /><br />All the best in your career! :D<br /><br />Leow Min Yu<br />Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08815595973604977412noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3456408080678473640.post-60291731526068136762013-02-23T18:01:35.086-08:002013-02-23T18:01:35.086-08:00Hi Choung,
Thank you for your kind feedback and ...Hi Choung, <br /><br />Thank you for your kind feedback and I have made the necessary changes. I cannot believe that I actually miss out that part. <br /><br />Cheers,<br />JackAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15476233831203292550noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3456408080678473640.post-2196092831280952522013-02-23T09:19:46.496-08:002013-02-23T09:19:46.496-08:00Hi Jack,
I think you have done a good job in showi...Hi Jack,<br />I think you have done a good job in showing your skills to the employer. Your letter is also clear and well-structured but it can be improved with some fixing in grammar and use of words:<br /><br />1/ “which I believed is a valuable characteristic for this job -> I believe is… You may want to use present tense here<br /><br />2/ Also in the line “It allows me to work well..”, but the sentence above you use verb tense, maybe you may want to try for consistency in your verb tense.<br /><br />3/”motivated team player that is “ -> who is.<br /><br />I think the employer will see you are a well-qualified applicant for this job through this cover letter. I hope you will get the position you want.<br />Le Chuonghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07695724355729736636noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3456408080678473640.post-61732025460068766782013-02-23T07:48:08.986-08:002013-02-23T07:48:08.986-08:00Hi Amira,
Thank you for your feedback. I have don...Hi Amira,<br /><br />Thank you for your feedback. I have done up the necessary changes. <br />As for the job qualifications, I was hoping if they could be more lenient after reading my cover letter as I do not have 2 years of working experience.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15476233831203292550noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3456408080678473640.post-66598148685521521482013-02-23T04:52:15.391-08:002013-02-23T04:52:15.391-08:00hi jack!
Your letter seems to have concrete, logi...hi jack!<br /><br />Your letter seems to have concrete, logical and well substantiated points. I also find it interesting and original.<br /><br />However, I may have some issues with correctness in your cover letter.<br />1. 'I am currently an undergraduate in the National University of Singapore, perusing a degree in Bachelor of Science, majoring in statistics, and expecting to graduate in May 2014': I think there's a typo error here where 'pursuing' was spelled as 'perusing' instead.<br /><br />2. 'I believed that my experience in the outdoor sector will enhance my ability of dealing with people and stress': I don't think that it's necessary for you to use past tense here because I'm sure you still believe that your experience enhances your ability of dealing with people and stress, right? (:<br /><br />There are a few more grammatical errors here and there but I'm sure that with another round of proofreading, your cover letter is pretty good to go (:<br /><br />However, don't you think you're a little overqualified for the job which you're applying for since the job only requires a polytechnic diploma instead of a degree?<br /><br />Aside from that, good job! I enjoyed reading your thoughtful cover letter (:Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com